tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4354014186327833282.post621632321967942897..comments2010-04-28T05:03:24.049-07:00Comments on Reading: 170581http://www.blogger.com/profile/13295783537244976335noreply@blogger.comBlogger2125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4354014186327833282.post-36638367619242521192010-03-25T05:02:46.587-07:002010-03-25T05:02:46.587-07:00I think you need to add more details describing Em...I think you need to add more details describing Emma and her situation. I have a vivid picture of everything. I think you need to describe other characters too. I really think you need to check your grammar and spelling. It made it hard to understand. I would like to know how she got courageous. I would like to know how people felt when she said she was a woman not a man. I'm pretty impressed how Emma could do these things but I think you need to describe more of her personal life.170672https://www.blogger.com/profile/13261626278755668291noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4354014186327833282.post-41196633761285507802010-03-23T03:04:15.762-07:002010-03-23T03:04:15.762-07:00I think you did well but I think u needed some mor...I think you did well but I think u needed some more detail in yours. I also didn't really understand what side the woman was on. And what do you mean by her missions. I think you need to add more detail so the reader knows more. Otherwise it was good.170693https://www.blogger.com/profile/08028931704640656047noreply@blogger.com